In the Line of Fire, by Matthew Angelo
Publisher: Less Than Three Press
Release Date: May 16, 2017
Andrew’s life in the Marine Corp is thrown into upheaval when he agrees to testify against the mafia—and life under the constant supervision of the FBI is made only moderately better by the compelling, attractive agent babysitting him.
Agent Shane lost his lover to the mafia, the very same men he must protect Andrew from, making it harder than ever to let the past lie and move on with his future. But with hitmen, betrayal, and violence around every corner, it’s unlikely he or Andrew will ever get to see that future, and whether or not they could have one together.
I always finish a book. No matter what, I finish it. This time? This was the hardest book to finish. Hardest ever. I’m so disappointed in myself for doing this to myself, but I really do have this thing inside me that won’t let me put a book down if I’m going to review it. I have other books I’m not done with, but I do intend to finish them eventually. This one should have gone on the “don’t finish ever” shelf.
For starters, I know that advanced review copies are not error proof. I have no problem with that. I don’t mind errors at all because I know not everyone is perfect and to produce a perfect book is REALLY HARD. So I get it. But this one? It is riddled with errors from the first page, to the last. Not just the little spelling or punctuation errors, but serious tense errors. There are also some major continuity issues, sentences that are not complete, nor do they make sense. Really, it’s riddled with problems. It hurt my brain to read because I had to try so hard to read the words as they were and not let my mind do it’s own form of predictive text. In all honesty, it seems like the author wrote the book and this was a very first draft. It looks like it have never had a second read through, not to mention an editor. Because of this, it severely hurt my opinion of the story.
The story could have been fun. A simple protection tale, FBI agent who needs to prove himself and get his life back together after a terrible loss, and the Marine that he’s protecting. But the FBI agent was not likable. The Marine was okay but such a child. The “love interest” plot was utterly ridiculous, and the whole thing comes to a crashing halt by the end when I’m grasping for straws, trying to figure out why, how, and OMG are you kidding me with this.
I think with a serious edit job, a major story and plot clean up, this could be a decent book. Sadly, it’s not even close.
Matthew Angelo is a part-time writer and full-time photographer in the Northern Colorado area. In his free time, he likes to watch episodes of Doctor Who and working out. He loves all things that deal with photography and enjoys all things paranormal even if he is a bit of a skeptic. He is also the author of The Heart of The Dragon Series available from Extasy Books/Devine Destinies and A Question of Honor from Less Than Three Press.
I received an advanced copy of this novel in exchange for a fair and honest review.